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young composer
Composer, Pianist, Poet, Arstist, Philosopher

Date Joined Jan 2007
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Posted 8/3/2007 2:10 PM (GMT -6)

This is the first movement of my first piano trio, in yet again, another minor key D minor. There are some good parts in it, however, there are also some bad parts. Tell me what you think.

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Cattie
Temple University

Date Joined Mar 2007
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Posted 8/3/2007 11:53 PM (GMT -6)

I think I know what you mean by 'bad' parts? I didn't like the exposed "1-and -and -and -and" rhythms at about 26 seconds... I guess to me they make the piece sound like an exercise in syncopation, especially because they're arpeggiated... but you do go on to create some nice textures... overall I think you're using too basic a rhythm for a motive, a rhythm that should be used instead to make the piece harmonically and texturally more complex.

All I would do is rethink the over-exposed parts, and the piece should sound 10 times better.

Post Edited (Cattie) : 8/4/2007 12:05:33 AM (GMT-5)

young composer
Composer, Pianist, Poet, Arstist, Philosopher

Date Joined Jan 2007
Total Posts : 167

Posted 8/4/2007 1:08 PM (GMT -6)

Thats, exactly what I thought, however, I couldn't figure out what to do, so I just posted like it is.

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